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This is really, really excellent - I'm so excited there will be more! The character voices were really spot on, and I loved Nana and Dean. Kids are so hard to write well, but you did a fantastic job. And it was very cool to see how the situation brought up issues for everyone. Eliot worrying he'll screw up a kid because he can't figure out why he's screwed up - that feels so true to his character. I loved it.

I particularly enjoyed the thought of them calling Sophie and Maggie for advice on how to entertain a kid. And I want some of Eliot's pie. Mmm, pie. ^_^ I sort of kept forgetting about the famine, but then you'd throw in a reference to food prices, or Eliot's work, and it would come back. Which totally works for me, because it wouldn't be something they'd think about all the time, if it was just their reality. Very nice.

And this part of the story really feels complete as it is. Not that I don't want the rest, because I totally do, and can't wait to read it. But yeah, this part feels very self-contained, and could stand on its own. That said, I'll be eagerly awaiting more!! XD